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PostSubject: Glutch's Application to the House.   Fri Mar 11, 2011 12:00 am

Full name of your character: Glutch Dawnmourn (He does not want anyone to even name his last name.)

Character race: Forsaken

Character class and level: 85 Warlock

Character age: (( Age calculated to human years. Undead please fill in age of death, and years spent as undead. )) 30 years in life 2 years in death.

Brief Character History: Glutch was working as a royal guard of stormwind when he died by an assault of orcs. His corpse was burried on a mystical place by his wife. He was then rebourn by a Death Knight. (His best friend that stopped playing wow about 2 years ago). Clutch later became a royal apothecary. He had big succes and was promoted to high ranks among the apothecaries.

Overall Description: (( Physical description, distinguishing marks, if any. )) He is nothing different from a regular forsaken.

Personality: (( Also any strenghts or flaws your character might have, if any. ))

Hobbies and small pleasures: Testing potions and elexirs at living objects.

Why does he / she wish to join the House? : He seeks to join the House since he wants to work more closely for the Dark Lady.

Where did he / she hear about the House? : He saw them having a meeting once. And found out Information about them ((IC))

Rate your character's power oon a 1-10 scale, 1 being a lowly beggar, 10 being the Lich King / Illidan / etc: 7


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PostSubject: Re: Glutch's Application to the House.   Fri Mar 11, 2011 2:00 am

Heya,

Thanks for applying.

How did your char become a DK exactly?

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PostSubject: Re: Glutch's Application to the House.   Fri Mar 11, 2011 2:18 am

Although it is good to know you have interest in joining the House, your character lacks a bit of origionality in my opinion.
Leaving some information about your character out of it so others can find that out ICly isn't bad, but this is seems too little.

Ask yourself questions like the one Docter Plaguous asked: How did your character become a deathknight?
How did he became a apothecary and how did he gain his promotions in it?
So give it a little more detailed.

Next, think about how you think your character looks. Just saying he looks like any other forsaken isn't really a good discription. Sure, OOCly all forsaken look pretty much alike, but that doesn't restrict you to modify that a little ICly.

Lastly, your character seems to lack a personality. I suggest you really think up something. A character without a unique personality is not very much.

And look at some other submission here to look for inspiration and feel free to ask for more advice. I will gladly help you.
Oh and please think of this has constructive critisism. I am not trying to bitch about your application, but to help you.
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PostSubject: Re: Glutch's Application to the House.   Fri Mar 11, 2011 9:27 am

I agree with Servalas. While there's nothing outright wrong with the application, it feels a little thin. If he was a guard originally, how did he turn to being an apothecary? He can't have had any knowledge, so who thaught him? When you say mystical place about where he was buried, what do you mean? Was it a magical place? Or just a strange one? Why would he be buried there instead of a regular graveyard? This death knight, why did he choose him specifically for raising? As for his looks, he short or tall? thin, fat? decomposed or still close to his living looks? Is he one of those trying to fight the rot by surgery, perfume and more, or does he accept it? And so on.. Smile There's lots of potentional for fleshing things out a bit.
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PostSubject: The new post :P   Fri Mar 11, 2011 4:58 pm

[quote="Gutch"]Full name of your character: Glutch Dawnmourn (He does not want anyone to even name his last name.)

Character race: Forsaken

Character class and level: 85 Warlock

Character age: (( Age calculated to human years. Undead please fill in age of death, and years spent as undead. )) He was 30 years when he died. He has lived 2 years as a forsaken.

Brief Character History: Glutch was working as a royal guard of stormwind when he died by an assault of orcs. His corpse was burried on a hidden place by his wife. He was then rebourn by his old friend who had been turned to a Death Knight by the Scourge. Though he became a forsaken after the rebirth and had to leave the Alliance Terretory. He was allowed into Undercity (since he was a Forsaken^^') and began as an apprentice to the Alchemists. After a time of work and training he became a skilled Achemist. He got promotions by the efforts he'd done and how much he'd discovered. He even helped out with the recepie of the Blight. Though he had no idea what it was needed for. He later on started to slaughter alliance. He even killed his own familly members and relatives.

Overall Description: (( Physical description, distinguishing marks, if any. )) He is slighty bigger than the most Forsakens and he has a littiraly huge wound or rather more scar by the left side of his neck. There is only bones visible.

Personality: (( Also any strenghts or flaws your character might have, if any. )) Glutch is a cold person. He doesn't really often listen to others since he thinks everything that goes wrong is someone elses fault and that he's always right. He have a problem though. He's always calm. That makes him a worthless person to help others in danger. But since he's an Apothecary he doesn't need to worry about others. He is a rather strange Forsaken.
With the fact he likes the taste of blood, denies that he is dead and that he never feel bity or even fear the gratest fears. (Such as things that forsakens even fear.) He has a extremely bad humor too. There's not really much more to say.

Hobbies and small pleasures: Testing new elexirs and poisons at living objects. Slaughter of Alliance.

Why does he / she wish to join the House? : He seeks to join the House since he wants to serve the Dark Lady better than before.

Where did he / she hear about the House? : He saw them having a meeting once. And found out Information about them ((IC))

Rate your character's power oon a 1-10 scale, 1 being a lowly beggar, 10 being the Lich King / Illidan / etc: 7

(( And yeah. I forgot the personallity thing. And yeah. I agree. It was a lame application. I had to go so I wrote it quickly. This time I actually spent some time at it. Hope it's better. And yeah. If you read again he didn't become a Death Knight. His friend did become a Death Knight.))


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PostSubject: Re: Glutch's Application to the House.   Fri Mar 11, 2011 5:40 pm

That's much better. Smile He sounds like he'd fit in well in the House's crowd.
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PostSubject: Re: Glutch's Application to the House.   Fri Mar 11, 2011 7:10 pm

Jayantheney wrote:
That's much better. Smile He sounds like he'd fit in well in the House's crowd.
Cheers ! ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Glutch's Application to the House.   Fri Mar 11, 2011 8:09 pm

It looks a lot better indeed.
And I am glad to see that you take the time to improve your application instead of stop trying.

Anyway, look for the councilors ingame and we will arrange an interview.
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PostSubject: Re: Glutch's Application to the House.   Fri Mar 11, 2011 10:20 pm

Find two councillors or myself for an interview.

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